如何寫出英語高分作文(2)
如何寫出英語高分作文
?、匍_門見山、點(diǎn)題。
?、谡媲榱髀?,理由充分。
③文中帶圈的連詞使用得恰當(dāng),使文章過渡自然、
④巧妙使用句型以表決心。
[點(diǎn)評(píng)]:檔次13-14分。
?、偾宄磉_(dá)寫作目的,要點(diǎn)齊全。
?、谡Z言表達(dá)靈活多樣,字里行間流露出真情實(shí)感,文章有感染力。
③恰當(dāng)使用連詞和從句,語言流暢,且無錯(cuò)誤,是一篇高質(zhì)量的作文。
[高分突破]
?、傥捏w:記敘文。
?、谝c(diǎn):what → when →how → why → hope and plan for the future。
?、蹠r(shí)態(tài):一般現(xiàn)在時(shí),一般過去時(shí),一般將來時(shí)的自然變化。
內(nèi)容具有開放性,但它也是"控制性"的寫作試題,因此不能隨意發(fā)揮,要善于抓信息,寫完要點(diǎn)。選用這兩篇學(xué)生真實(shí)習(xí)作,一是因?yàn)樗麄冞x材相同,二是因?yàn)樗麄兌际怯⒄Z成績優(yōu)秀的同學(xué)。同學(xué)b靈活使用連詞so…that, so, little by little, when, so that等,恰到好處地使用新句型和短語used to, became interested in, come true……等,使內(nèi)容豐富,讀起來優(yōu)美流暢。其實(shí)這些表達(dá)同學(xué)a也會(huì),只是缺乏技術(shù)加工。通過這兩篇作文點(diǎn)評(píng),同學(xué)們便能悟出其中的奧妙。
四、培養(yǎng)途徑
1. 根據(jù)老師布置的寫作內(nèi)容,獨(dú)立完成一篇寫作。
2. 與同伴合作,交流自己的寫作,通過交流找出各自作文中寫得好的地方和優(yōu)美的句子,合作創(chuàng)造一篇新的文章,供大家欣賞。
3. 找老師點(diǎn)評(píng),請求老師指點(diǎn),尤其是怎樣潤色。
4. 自己糾錯(cuò),寫下反思。
五、備考演練
a
縉云山是重慶著名的游覽勝地,每天有大量的游客。請你根據(jù)下面提供的信息寫一篇報(bào)道,說明現(xiàn)在的游客在環(huán)境保護(hù)方面的變化。
寫作要求:
1. 詞數(shù)在100左右。
2. 條理清楚,語句通順。
3. 開頭已寫好,但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Jinyun mountain is a famous place of interest …
b
閱讀電視廣告詞:"if we don't save water , the last drop of water will be a tear-drop."根據(jù)提示,寫一篇60-80詞的短文。
提示:
1. 生活離不開水。
2. 可飲用水在減少。
3. 水污染嚴(yán)重。
4. 應(yīng)保護(hù)水源,再利用水。思路點(diǎn)撥與參考答案
a. [思路點(diǎn)撥]:
?、傥捏w:記敘文。
?、跁r(shí)態(tài):一般過去時(shí)態(tài),一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。采用正反對(duì)比的寫作手法,增加感染力。
?、蹖懽髂康模焊嬖V讀者保護(hù)環(huán)境的重要性。
Jinyun mountain is a famous place of interest . Every day a lot of tourists come here to enjoy its beauty. but a few years ago,some of them paid no attention to protecting the environment. they threw their rubbish,such as plastic bags,fruit skins and waste paper on the ground. sometimes they broke trees,picked flowers and killed birds. Some even made fires in the woods to cook food. How dangerous it was. luckily, great changes have taken place here. tourists are used to putting their rubbish into dustbins, and they are doing their best to protect the birds and plants as well. They bring their own meals instead of cooking to prevent starting a forest fire in the mountains. All these changes make us very happy.
b. [思路點(diǎn)撥]:
?、賷A敘夾議(說明現(xiàn)狀,談?wù)劯邢?。
②時(shí)態(tài):一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。
?、蹚V告詞的含義--水很重要,應(yīng)保護(hù)和再利用(寫作意圖)。
Water is very important to humans. we can't live without water. The water we can drink is falling. but some people don't seem to care about it. They waste a lot of water. They pour dirty water into rivers and lakes. Water pollution is getting more and more serious. So we must do something to stop the pollution. We not only protect the water but also find ways to reuse it. if we don't do this, the last drop of water will be a tear-drop.